Editing is tough
Recently I was participating in a Bschool contest. Somehow I managed to clear the first round and in the second round I had to do a Case analysis. Usually this means a surgical analysis supported by data, charts, facts and the associated jargons.
The case revolved around how the new generation is aping the west and have no clue about our culture and history. The author of the case was of the opinion that we could learn a lot from our culture and the analysis required coming up with reasons, challenges and possible solutions.
I was in no mood to do a MBA type analysis and decided that I would do a blogger type analysis. The catch was that word limit was 600 words. In half an hour I had whipped up some 880 words which if read by any of my professors would get me expelled from my institute :). Now when it came to trimming it down there was no way I could do it. I spent two hours cutting it down and trimming it until I somehow managed to bring it down to 603 words. And thats when I realized that editing is a tougher job than it looks.
So I thought I will post both the version the uncut version and the trimmed one since I dont think with the sort of analysis I did, the contest people would give me a second look. So here you go.
The uncut version
"A scene from the recent hit movie “Lagey Raho Munnabhai “ has this scene when the protagonist asks his sidekick about who Mahatma Gandhi is. The scene evoked quite a few laughs because it came across as an honest and an innocent one.
Let us just zoom out of the movie and think for a moment. Was that an exaggerated scene to drive home a simple point? Is the average Indian so woefully unaware of his history, his culture, his heritage and the knowledge passed down generation to generation?
Prima facie the evidence seems to be a misleading no. The logically trained mind would immediately pinpoint the fact that protagonist in the movie was an uneducated man and education does provide everyone with a keyhole view to vast heritage our country possesses. What one fails to acknowledge is the flagging interest of the average Indian voyeur to choose that particular keyhole and more importantly that the keyhole is getting smaller and clouded.
Hue and cry was raised over the NCERT history books, which according to historians, contained factual errors. To quote a few, the new texts contain no mention of the assassination of Mahatma Gandhi, the role of India's first prime minister Jawaharlal Nehru has been limited to only two small mentions, and a lot more. - as president of the Lahore session of the Congress party and as the prime minister of independent India, The Vedic age has been clubbed with the Harappan civilization and the Egyptian, Mesopotamian, Chinese, Greek, Roman and Iranian civilizations have been classified as "early non-Indian civilizations.
Does the blame solely lie on the education system? In my childhood days, a typical Sunday would involve watching Ramyana or Mahabharata on Doordarshan, reading Amar Chitra comic books and my grandmother telling me some folk tale. Nowadays my nephew is interested in playing with his gameboy (a sort of video game), watching the new episode of pokemon on cartoon network, and going out for lunch at the nearest Pizza Hut.
So do the above mentioned facts signify the problem? To my mind, these are symptoms, not the actual problem, nor the cause of the problem. So what is the cause of the problem? The world is competitive as it has never been before. Parents want their children to work for the biggest MNCs, want them to earn in dollars, want them to become doctors from well known institutes. There is a distinct mindset shift from Agriculture to Government services to professional careers. And what role does history or for that matter ancient culture has to do in achieving this aim? The answer is a glaring none. As for the education system and the issue of history books, there seems to be a lot of vested interest and bureaucracy which only adds to the problem.
As they say it is easy to pinpoint a cause but the trouble lies in formulating a solution which is practical. Lets look at the major stake holders involved
An average Indian School going child
The parents of the child
The educational system
The solution lying in analyzing each of the stake holder and how they can be incentivised or rather stimulate an interest in historical facts.
1) If you see the psyche of the average Indian child, it revolves mainly around scoring high in subjects that will enable them to attain their professional dreams, extracurricular activities consisting of television especially cartoons, videogames, internet etc. To stimulate interests in them, the solution lies in providing learning through the mediums they currently enjoy. Video games revolving around Indian History, cartoons revolving on Indian culture and revelations are means to capture their mindshare. Internet can also play a role through websites hosting quizzes for children, story telling CDs etc.
2) Those parents, who are single mindedly focused on their children succeeding in competitive exams and charting out activities which will look good on resumes, are a little hard to incentivize. The nuclear family structure also ensures that grandparents are not there to help the child develop interests in folk tales or history. The solution lies in attacking the root cause of the problem and a pragmatic one would be to include a general knowledge section in competitive exams to ensure that now the onus is on the parents too to make their child aware about our culture and history. This will also ensure that students with a well rounded personality get through in such exams.
3) An easier said than done solution for the education system calls for a major overhaul to remove bureaucracy and vested interests. An easier solution is to target the teachers who at end of the day impart knowledge. The onus should be on the teachers rather than on the system. The teachers should make courses like History civics a fun course rather than one where student learn facts and dates by rote. The BeD course which trains the teachers in history should impart ways of making teaching history fun and at the same time more focused."
The edited version
"Who is Gandhi? So asks the protagonist of the recent hit movie “Lagey Raho Munnabhai “. The scene evoked quite a few laughs because it came across as an honest and an innocent one. But was that an exaggerated scene to drive home a simple point? Is the average Indian so woefully unaware of his history and heritage?
The logically trained mind would pinpoint the fact that protagonist in the movie was an uneducated man and education does provide everyone with a keyhole view to the vast heritage our country possesses. What one fails to acknowledge is the flagging interest of the average Indian voyeur to choose that particular keyhole and more importantly that the keyhole is getting smaller and clouded. Hue and cry was raised over the NCERT history books, which according to historians, contained factual errors.
So does the blame solely lie on the education system? In my childhood days, a typical Sunday would involve watching Ramyana or Mahabharata on Doordarshan, reading Amar Chitra comic books and my grandmother telling me some folk tale. Nowadays my nephew is interested in playing with his gameboy (a sort of video game) and watching the cartoon network.
So do the above mentioned facts signify the problem? To my mind, they are symptoms of the problem. The world is competitive as it has never been before. Parents want their children to work for the biggest MNCs, earn in dollars, and go for professional careers. And seemingly history does not have any role in this rat’s race. As for the education system and the issue of history books, there seems to be a lot of vested interest and bureaucracy which adds to the problem. Adding to this is the ever growing influence of the west.
As they say it is easy to pinpoint a problem but the trouble lies in formulating a solution which is practical. Let us look at the major stakeholders involved
· School going child
· Parents of the child
· Educational system
The solution lies in analyzing each of the stakeholders and how they can be incentivised.
1) If you see the psyche of the a child, it revolves mainly around scoring high in subjects that will enable them to attain their professional dreams, extracurricular activities consisting of television especially cartoons, videogames, internet etc. To stimulate interest in them, learning should be provided through the mediums they currently enjoy. Video games and cartoons revolving around Indian history and culture are means to capture their mindshare. Internet can play a role through websites hosting quizzes for children, story telling CDs etc.
2) Parents, with their focus on charting out a safe career for their wards are a little hard to incentivize. The nuclear family structure also ensures that grandparents are not there to help the child develop interests in folk tales or history. The solution lies in attacking the root cause of the problem and a pragmatic one would be to include a general knowledge section in competitive exams to ensure that now the onus is on the parents too. This will also ensure that students with a well rounded personality get through in such exams.
3) An easier said than done solution for the education system calls for a major overhaul to remove bureaucracy and vested interests. A simpler solution is to target the teachers who at end of the day impart knowledge. The teachers should make courses like History civics a fun course rather than one where student learn facts and dates by rote. The BeD course which trains the teachers in history should impart ways of stimulating interest in children."












All set to leave Abu at 4:30 in the morning
Skatey almost got his head blown off pulling this stunt :)